1表达一下
2自己认为比较好的句子是那些,说明理由。
3积累一些好句子。First
of all,On the one hand,On the other hand ,be ready to do sth,What is more,be willing to do sth 等让学生以“My best friend”为题目,运用摘抄的短语、常用短语写一篇短文
句子结构简单、单一
非谓语动词Guo Jing is a man.He is not very clever.He married high IQ Huan Rong.Huang is the daughter of the president of TaoHuaDao Group.
→Guo Jing,a not very ingellient man,married a girl with an extremely high IQ named Huang Rong who is the daugher of the president of THD Group.
I covered my ears and tried to keep the noise out.But I failed.
→I covered my ears,trying to keep the noise out,but failed.
I couldn’t go on studying because there was so much noise
troubling me.
→I couldn’t go on studying with so much noise troubling me.
4.从句
可以运用从句的形式,如定语从句、名词性从句、状语从
句,使句式多样化,语言更生动,文章更精美。如:
In recent years,Nanchang has been advancing very fast.It
makes people’s lives convenient and pleasant.
→In recent years,Nanchang has been advancing very fast,
which makes people’s life convenient and pleasant.
What’s more,people have easy access to the Internet.The In
ternet enables them to send and receive e-mails whenever they like. →What’s more,people have easy access to the Internet,
which enables them to send and receive e -mails whenever they
like.
(4)“5W1H”提问法
即要求学生根据主题就who,what,where,
when,why,how 等进行提问。问题的大小详略视需
要而定,不能千篇一律。如:让学生an unforgettable
trip 就可以围绕这么五个问题:Who did you go
with?What did you do there?Where did you go?
When did leave?Why did you go there?How did
you go there?让学生把这些问题串在一起就是一篇
短文。
一、规范性———语言规范,语句通顺
语言规范,首先要做到词汇和句子结构的正确性。(动词最易
出错。)还要做到用英语进行思维,用较地道的英文句式或用语表
达思想。另外还要符合英美国家的风俗习惯、社交礼节和文化传
统。试看学生习作中常见的病例。
1.我的同班同学们在地里现在正努力干活。
误:Myclassmatesareworkhardinthefieldnow.(×)
分析:分不清是动宾结构还是系表结构。
正:Myclassmatesareworkinghardinthefieldnow(√)
2.我是五年以前来到这里的。
误:Iamfiveyearsagocamehere.(×)
分析:长期受母语影响,汉语式英语表达。
正:Icameherefiveyearsago.(√)
3.明天我们学校要开运动会。
误:Thereisgoingtohaveasportsmeetinginourschooltomorrow.(×) 分析:“Therebe”和“have”句形不分。
正:Thereisgoingtobeasportsmeetinginourschooltomorrow.(√) 4.他脸上总是有微笑。
误:Healwayswithasmileinhisface.(×)
分析:用介词短语充当了谓语。
正:Healwayssmilesinhisface.(√)
5.过桥时,我看见一个男孩在这正玩。
误:IsawaboyplayingherewhenIacrossedabridge.(×)
分析:用介词充当了谓语。
正:IsawaboyplayingherewhenIcrossedabridge.(√)
6.你不该在这游泳。
误:Youmustn’tswimminghere.(×)
分析:情态动词后应是动词原形。
正:Youmustn’tswimhere.(√)
7.我们非常高兴。
误:Weveryhappy.
分析:丢动词,汉语化。
正:Weareveryhappy.
8、他经常用铅笔写信。
误:Heoftenusesapenciltowriteletters.(×)
分析:不符合英美习惯。
正:Heoftenwritesletterswithapencil.(√)
二、条理性———层次分明,重点突出
条理性是指在谋篇布局时,精心选择素材,合理安排文章的结
构。对于整篇文章的结构,一般按开头(beginning),中间(body)和
结尾(ending)三部分进行布局,每个段落围绕各自的中心内容展
开,中心内容通常通过主题句(topicsentence)来表达。每段围绕主
题句进行展开,可以使文章重点突出,层次分明,首尾呼应。请看下
面两篇文章中括号中的分析和划线的主题句。
另外,要做到层次分明还得安排好写作的顺序。记叙文往往按
时间的先后顺序来写;场面描写往往按空间顺序来写。
三、流畅性———行文连贯,过渡自然
流畅性,要求在遣词造句和组织素材的过程中,恰到好处地应
用一些关联词,增强句子之间以及段落之间的紧凑性和逻辑性,使
整个文章行文连贯、过渡自然、层次分明,思路清晰。初中写作常用
的关联词有:
1.表示条件:if,unless,aslongas,
2.表示时间:when,after,before,until,assoonas,fromthenon,then,
suddenly,atthesametime
3.表示因果:since,as,because(of),for,so,sothat,asaresult,therefore.
thus
4.表示转折:but,however,yet,instead,ontheotherhand,although
5.表示目的:sothat,inorderthat
6.表示陈述:infact,actually,tobehonest,Itissaidthat----,totellyouthetruth
7.表示顺序:aboveall,firstofall,first,firstly,secondly,thenext,finally,
intheend,atlast
8.表示补充:What’smore,besides,also,aswell,inaddition
四、多样性———句式多样,表达简洁
多样性是指文章根据内容和情景的变化,不断变化其句式,使
句式灵活多样,表达精练简洁,使文章的语言结构更加丰富多彩。
富有节奏感和音律美。使文章锦上添花。试体会下列不同句式的表
达效果。
1.WhenIheardthenews,Icouldn’thelplaughing.
修改为:Hearingthenews,Icould’helplaughing.
分析:用非谓语动词,可避免经常反复使用的时间状语从句。
2.Abacuswasinventedinthesixthcentury.Itisusedforcounting.
修改为:Abacuswasinventedinthesixthcenturyanditisusedforcounting.
分析:用并列句,可避免单一的主谓宾句型结构。
3.Mr.WangtaughtmeEnglishatprimaryschool.Hewasagoodteacher.
修改为:Mr.WangwhotaughtmeEnglishatprimaryschoolwasagoodteacher.
分析:用复合句,可避免单一的主、谓、宾句型结构。
除此之外,作为优秀作文还要求做到格式正确,字迹端正,卷
面整洁,大小写和标点符号运用无误,单词拼写正确,要有首尾句,
并适当考虑情感因素,增强文章的思想性和感情色彩。
In the picture we can see a man staring….
The picture set me thinking ,as is known to all ,qq and @ is typical language with the development of information technology,people’s life