上海中考英语作文

上海中考英语作文学习资料

?评分标准

上海中考英语作文总分为20分，其中内容分8分、语言分8分、组织结构分4分。

以下为上海中考英语作文官方评分标准：

1. 内容分8分。内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚完整。

2?语言分8分。学生需用语规范，表达准确，无或少见语法错误，词汇拼写正确，句型

使用恰当。首先是字数，少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。

3?组织结构分4分，也就是我们常说的文采分。根据学生使用复杂句型/单词和谚语/俗

语的情况来加分。

一?汪意点：

每少5个词扣0.5分，拼写错误每处扣0.5分，标点，大小写错误每2处扣0.5分3内容和语言表达总分达15分及以上，得2~3分内容和语言总分13~14分，如确有好句型或表达用语，可酌情给1~2分通篇句型，句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，也不给分开头句+给的几个参考点+结尾句+亮点。

先划档次：A档18~15分B档14.5~12分C档11.5~8分D档3.5~0分

然后再仔细批阅看有否语法错误，最后给出总分。

三.学生常出现的问题：

1. 内容空洞，没有清晰的思路，表达能力不强，总是用一些不合适的句子内容来表达，所以可能让老师觉得理由或是内容太假，当然也就得不了高分。

2. 议论过多，描写不足。大多数情况下，我们把议论当成的作文的重点，所以常常会跑题。

应当多描述提示的内容或加以想像，不能只翻译了事。

3. 总是使用同一个主语写句子，重复太多。尽量使用不同的主语来表达，比如：I must learn

En glish well. 就可以换成：It is importa nt for me to lear n En glish well.

4. 结构散漫，想哪儿写哪儿，乱七八糟。应该使用总分或总分总的结构。

5. 都是简单句，缺少复合句。多用状语从句，宾语从句，定语从句及一些重要的句型，也人

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语态。

6. 连词的使用较少，句子之间的连接很生硬。可以加入一些：比如：to my surprise （让我惊

讶的是）,what' s more （而且，还有）等，让上文与下文衔接更紧密。意思也能更流畅地表

达。

四.中考写作高频使用词组、句法

1. 作文开头的有用句

As we all know. As it is kn own to all, It ' s known to all that' s comm on kno wledge that …It ' s

commonly accepted that ?? There is no denying that …How time flies! In a blink of an eye, Time flies like a speeding arrow, Time goes like the flowing water.

2、中间分层部分的有用结构：

分正反两面论述：0n one hand. On the other hand 分两点：For one thing. For another,

分三点：Firstly, Secon dly, Last but not least

3、结尾部分

All in all, In a word, In conclusion, In brief, In short, To put everything in a shell, 概括的说，

简单的说Last but n ot least

组织语言发表观点的In my opinion, From my point of view, In my eyes, As far as I am

concern ed, Believe it or not,

表示递进的In additi on Furthermore More importa ntly What 'more Moreover 其他与

"我”有关的写作材料1、重点句型It's+a. for sb.to do sth. So +a./ad. That such a

+a.+n. that too …to do Not ….until That ' why+ 句子那是。。。的原因It 'said that + 句子

There ' no doubt that+ 句子毫无疑问?… It goes without saying that+ 句子毫无疑

问?…There' no need to do 没必要做?…There' no point in doing 做某事毫无意

义2、提建议Had better do/not do How/what about doing Why not do/why don、t+ 句子I think you should do I suggest that you should do If I were you, I would do 我要是你的话，我会做'、' It 'best to do 3、表示喜欢，感兴趣Like/love/enjoy doing Be fond of/be keen on sth. Prefer to do A rather than do B Be interested in doing=show/take great interest in 4 、努力做''' Try to

do/strive to do Make efforts to do=make every effort to do Try one' best/do one' best to do Do what/everything sb can to do 5、打算做?…/计划做?…Intend to do/plan to do Be

going to do Decide to do Determine to do=be determine to do Make up one' mind to do 6、表示

想/希望Want to do=would like to do Hope to do Expect to do Wish to do Consider doing 7 、其他有用的短语From now on/sooner or later/in the near future Have positive attitude towards/enrich my knowledge/learn …by heart/ Meet with various kinds of difficulties /face difficulties bravely/overcome the difficulties Play an important role/part in ….8、其他有用的句式For the r eas on above,/After all/As for me,/Fra nkly speak in g/Ge nerally

speak in g/Believe it or no t,/As a Grade Ni ne stude nt,/The reas ons are as follows, People 'vi s w on…vary from person to person

4、增添亮点使用复合句和谚语谚语举例I firmly believe that “ A foreig n Ian guage is a weapon in the struggle of

life ” . As a famous saying goes, “A man becomes learned by asking questions. ”t 'common knowledge that the road to success is not always full of roses. An old

saying goes, “ Nothing is impossible to a willing heart. ”

五.2002-2013上海中考英语作文题目集锦

2002 My favorite thi ng(s) 我的心爱之物

2003 To be a lovely Shan gha in ese 做一个可爱的上海人

2004 Leave School 毕业时分

2005 Grow ing pains and gains 成长的烦恼

2006 I have a dream 我有一个梦

2007 A Story about My Pare nt（s）一个关于我父/母的故事

2008 Love Around Me 爱在我身边

2009 I want to do someth ing for my school 我想为我的学校做点什么

2010 rm proud of myself 我为我自己感到自豪

2011 My Favourite Thing （s）我的心爱之物

2012 If you are Joe.your friend Betty is upset because she cares too much about the result.

写给一个考试焦虑考生的一封信，并给予建议。

2013 Write at least 60 words about the topic “ How to protect myself.（以“如何保护自己"为

题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文）

六.近5年上海中考英语真题范文分享

2009命题作文

Write at least 60 words about the topic "I want to do someth ing for 以y 我想为学校”.（

做件事”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）

（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Use the following points as a reference.（以下内容仅供参考）

1 What do you want to do for your school?

2 Why do you want to do it?

3 How are you going to do it?

例文1：

I want to make school clea n. You may think it is very simple. But I don't think so. Our teacher said, "School is your home, you should keep it clea n." But I have n ever done anything to make school clean. For example, I have never told my classmate to pick up rubbish after he threw it on the gro un d. I also threw the rubbish on the ground. So I want to make school clea n so that every one can forgive me. During this summer holiday, I will go to school to make school clea n. Of course, I will do it with my classmates. We will make school clean every weekends next term as well. Now, do you think it is simple?

2 One possible version

I want to do something for my school I'm leaving my school. I want to plant a tree in my school

garde n. I have found there are too many buildi ngs and few trees in our school yard, so I want to make my school much gree ner and more beautiful. If I pla nt a tree there, maybe more and more stude nts will do as me. In their spare time, the stude nts can read un der the trees.

2010命题作文

上海中考英语作文题:I'm proud of myself

1、W hat kind of person are you?

2、W hat makes you proud of yourself(Give an example/examples)

3、W hy are you proud of yourself?

要求：至少60字

范文：1

I am a boy of less con fide nee. I always hate running. But as we all know, the stude nts of Grade

nine have to take part in the sports exam. At that mome nt, I just wan ted to give up. But my pare nts

encouraged me: "impossible is nothing," "you could challenge yourself!" so with the

encouragement of them, I tried my best to run and insisted on running. When I got to the finishing

lin e, I felt proud of myself, though I did n't get the good mark, I kn ew, I won. I created a miracle

for myself and I was so proud of myself!

2. I am proud of myself

The wheel of life has rolled fast through the past fifteen years. By looking backwards, I ' mo

proud of myself be cause I ' ve grown into a stro-igiinded person. It was the first time for me to

climb a high mountain alone. At first, I felt my body was filled with energy. As time went by,

tiredness made my step slow down. For many times, the idea of giving up the journey appeared in

my mi nd. But the say ing “ Accumulated water becomes a river. ” en abled me to move on. Though the power of one step seemed so weak, I in sisted on climb ing to the top. When I succeeded, I felt I

had reached a new height in my life. How proud I f being a sfrongon in ded pers on.

3.1 am proud of myself

I used to be a girl with few words. Last month I failed in the exam. I felt so depressed that I

couldn ' t help crying. However, my mother told me, “ The life is a tough road full of ups and downs. Every one has to experie nee the low times. ” Her en courag ing words lifted me up. I made up my

mind to prepare for the next exam. I always liste ned to the teacher carefully and did my homework

attentively. To my surprise, I achieved the best grade in the exam. At that time, I actually felt

proud of myself. I ' m proud because I achieved success as well as courage. Now I ' m more

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than before, and I always believe as long as you keep your heart facing the sun, the world will

always bring you new hopes .

2011话题补全式作文

Writing （作文）共18分

Write at least 60 words about the topic “ hrfa member of “

（以“我是……的一员”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格子”

提示：你可以作为任意兴趣小组或者社团的一员，或者作为家庭，班级，社区额的一员, 写出你的经历，感受等。

Use the followi ng poi nts as a refere nee

Are you glad to be a member of ........ ?

What do you do in it?

How do you feel as such a member?

例文：1

I ' m a Member of the Singing and Dancing ClubHello, every on e! I ' m very glad to be a member of the Singing and Dancing Club. I have bee n in this club for 2 years. I ' m an actor in the club. I li singing and dancing very much. I sing and dance with my classmates on weeke nds. Though I am very tired, I like to sing and dance every day. It makes me feel very happy.

2

In this world, every family has a mother, a father, a daughter or a son. For plenty of people, families are very importa

nt .whe n you are very said, you can found one or two pers ons to make

you feel happ in ess, this is you family.

I am very gold to become my family member, because I have a pretty good pare nt and a fairly

youn ger brother. When I come back, I always feel freedom and relaxed. My mother is a kind cook;

she has lots of experie nee in cook ing, so my brother and I are healthy.

As a daughter, I should n't make my pare nts worry .As a sister ,l should look after my brother .l

want to be a great member of my family ,l would try my best to do what l should do in the family

2012书信类作文

Writing （作文）:（共20分）

Write a letter in at least 60 words according to the given situation（根据所给情景写一圭寸不少

于60词的信）

Suppose you are Joe. Your friend Betty is upset about a coming exam for she cares too much about the result. What do you think? Try to offer her some advice.（假设你是Joe，你的好朋友Betty 因为过于在意考试结果而感到焦虑。请给他写一封信，谈谈你的看法，并给她一些建议。）

例文：1

Knowing that you care too much about the result, I am quite worried. Actually, it is no use being upset despite the importa nee of the result. There are some effective ways to calm dow n. Above all, keeping reminding yourself to stay in peace is the most helpful. Besides, it will help you to relax if you spare some time for recreati onal activities like sports. Fin ally, talk to your pare nts an d frien ds, who are always ready to comfort you. As is said by Steve Jobs, “ the journey is the reward.

sure you will get through this situati on.

2.

Dear Betty, How time flies! The exam is fin ally n ear at han d. Importa nt as it is to you, you really should n't care too much about the result and get yourself overly upset. Remember all the hard work you have put in! As long as you go with a calm mind and a positive attitude, I'm sure there will be nothing difficult for you and the exam will be smooth saili ng. I suggest you talk more to parents and teachers about your anxiety and take better care of your health such as getting