中考英语作文专项训练

中考英语作文专项训练

一、考点分析：

在中考中，写作占20分，分值所占比例大，而写作考察学生的英文综合运用能力，因此非常关键。

【中考英语作文的评分标准】

比较为学生所熟悉的就是“8+8+4”结构，即：

（一）内容：

7-8分：内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整。

5-6分：内容基本切题，意思大致连贯，表达基本清楚、但不够完整。

2-4分：内容不够切题，意思不够连贯，表达不够清楚、有些离题。

0-1分：文不对题，表达不清。

（二）语言：

①词数：每少5个字扣0.5分，以此类推。只写出个别单词、词不成句不给分。

②拼写：每错扣0.5分，同一错误不重复计数。

③语法：同②

④标点符号、大小写：每两处错误扣0.5分，但扣分总和不超过1分。

（三）组织结构：

①内容充实、上下文连贯、用语规范、表达准确、无语法错误；词汇和句型句式运用恰当，多

见好句型和习惯表达用语者，可给3-4分。

②内容充实、不写废话；上下文连贯、用语规范、表达准确、无或少见语法错误；词汇和句型

句式运用恰当，多见好句型和习惯表达用语者，可给2分。

③一般情况下，内容和语言累计得分在15分以上者（含），方可得到1-2分组织结构分。

④内容和语言在15分以下者，如文中有值得肯定的好句型和表达，可酌情考虑给1分组织结

构分。

⑤通篇句型、句式单一、词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，一般也不予给组织结构分。

二、写作中常见问题：

①内容空洞，没有清晰的思路，表达能力不强，表达生硬呆板，甚至中式英语翻译思维。

②议论过多，描写不足。大多数情况下，把议论当成的作文的重点，常常跑题。

③句式单一，都是简单句，缺少复合句。

④结构散漫，思维跳跃，文章缺乏条理性。

⑤连词的使用较少，并且使用单一，句子之间的连接很生硬。

⑥文章平淡，无亮点短语和句型，连接词等。

三、写作技巧分析：

【高分作文的必备元素】

1. 书写工整，书面整洁，很少有涂改痕迹。

2. 不出现语法，拼写，标点，大小写等错误。

3. 文章字数最好控制在80-100字之间，切记过长或者过短，8-10句即可。

4. 要点齐全。为了避免遗漏要点，可以将题目中给出的要点标注出来。

5. 开头言简意赅，不啰嗦，不偏题，迅速引入主题。

6. 连接词使用恰当，不重复，上下文有连贯性，使之自然成一体。

7. 应用词汇: 高级词汇的合理使用、同义词的变化使用、短语的恰当使用。

8. 多用亮点短语，并且使短语多样性，尽可能使用多种表达方式。

比如：同一个意思“帮助”，假如你就用一个动词“help”，显得词汇贫乏。如果能在作文中不断

地变换方式，用help、give sb. a hand、do sb. a favor、be in need of 等以表达“帮助”，表达更灵

活生动。

9.句式多样性，可适当使用陈述句，疑问句，祈使句及感叹句，强调句，倒装句，定语从句，

状语从句，宾语从句等。

10. 能够恰当使用谚语、格言、名言等给文章添彩。

11. 语法结构多样性,主动被动交叉用，原级比较级灵活用，非谓语动词恰当用。

12.灵活使用万能句型，增添文章亮点。

四、中考经典范文解读：

VII. Writing (作文) （共20分）

94. Write at least 60 words on the topic “I want to invent_____”

(以“我想要发明________”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)

（注意：1、在答题纸上将题目补充完整。

2、短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分

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The following is for reference only. (以下表达仅供参考)

?It can be used to…

?It will be exciting/necessary/helpful to…

范文精选一及点评：

I want to invent a flying car

It is not uncommon to meet traffic problems and serious air pollution in big city. It is a must to have a plan to improve the serious condition.

I get an idea to design my own flying machine like a car which can drive well in the street as well as fly between the high rises to avoid the traffic jam. What’s more, when it is moving ,it can transform the motion energy into electricity to drive the engine. Thus, it is possible to save a lot of fuel and reduce the air pollution. It is of great use to solve the problems of traffic jam and air pollution ,and even save the natural resource.

Bright idea can only be achieved with the determination and courage. I believe my idea will turn a new leaf of future life.

精彩亮点分析：

亮点一：高分短语

亮点二：it is a must 活用高频词

亮点三：定语从句描述自己设计的汽车

亮点四：高分短语

亮点五：be of great use 名词结构更高端

亮点六：被动语态，丰富句式

亮点七： turn a new leaf of future life 翻开未来生活的新篇章

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范文精选二及点评：

I want to invent a time machine

As a student who is experiencing unprecedented modern life nowadays, I would rather learn about the history and the future life of human being from a real experience than learn from a textbook. That’s why if I can work as a great inventor, inventing a time machine will be my first choice. The most important usage of my time machine will be visiting one of best schools in Tang Dynasty. As we all know, Tang Dynasty is famous for its open-minded education. Therefore, when I visit the school of the ancient city, I can not only try different ways of studying but communicate with people from different countries as well. Using a time machine is the most vivid way to learn history as it is both a record of mankind and a mirror of past, I am looking forward to the day when my time machine comes out.

精彩亮点分析：

亮点一：定语从句修饰对学生现在的生活

亮点二：用would rather … than … 表达学生的意愿

亮点三：用if条件状语从句表达主题

亮点四：be famous for 因…而著名

亮点五：not only … but … as well 不但…而且…

亮点六：用动名词词组做主语

亮点七：用idiom突出历史的重要性

亮点八：定语从句表达学生的期待

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范文精选三及点评：

I Want To Invent A Family Doctor Robot

I want to invent a family doctor robot, which can be used to cure the illness without going out of their home. As far as I’m concerned, it will be extremely helpful and useful because of the following reasons:

First, you can see the doctor immediately at home when you feel sick or get hurt. It can save us a lot of time, especially in emergency situations.

Furthermore, hospitals today are always filled with patients, not everyone can be taken good care of. However, with the help of our robot doctors, you can talk to your personal doctor one to one whenever you want.

In short, family doctor robots can make great contribution to our society.

精彩亮点分析：

亮点一：全文巧用“first, furthermore, in short” 等连接词，把家庭机器人医生的好处写的非常清晰，让阅卷老师一目了然。

亮点二：全文采用了定语从句、状语从句、并列句等多种长难句，为文采分增色不少。

亮点三：文中出现了“extremely, make contribution to” 这些超纲单词及词组，恰到好处地强调了家庭机器人医生的重要性，且为文采再次进行润色。

VII. Writing (作文)（共20分）

94.Write at least 60 words on the topic “I’m ready”(以“我准备好了”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标题符号不占格)

你对明天一定有着美好的憧憬，为此，你已经做好了哪方面的准？请结合你的经历或特长等，选取一个角度具体谈谈你是如何做准备的。

（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名以及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）The following is for reference only.(以下内容及供参考)

Independent be good at...

Responsible take part in...

Hardworking it helps me to...

范文精选一及点评：

I'M READY Summer holiday is coming, all my classmates are preparing to have a wonderful holiday, including me. I am ready to go to Bei Daihe, the seaside holiday resort, for swimming and having a good time on the seaside. I can not only appreciate the beautiful scenery but also breathe the fresh air. It looks good, isn't it? Before I go to the seaside, I think it's important to take something useful with me such as sunglasses,

bathing suit, suntan oil and my homework and so on. Well, the last I want to carry is some medicine, which can keep me safe. After that I should plan where I stay, play and how to get there. In conclusion, I do believe I can do it perfectly and enjoy myself. 精彩亮点分析：亮点一：非谓语动词including的巧妙使用。亮点二：同谓语的恰当使用，说明目的地是一个海滨度假圣地。亮点三：not only … but also … 表达度假不仅可以欣赏美景还可以呼吸新鲜空气。亮点四：运用反义疑问句，加强语气。亮点五：运用定语从句，修饰medicine。亮点六：巧妙使用“do“这个词，加强语言表达力度。

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范文精选二及点评：

I'M READY Are you a person who always likes to get ready for everything? Do you often make a full preparation for something before doing? I am such a guy due to an unforgettable experience.

I still remember it was a final exam, I had been playing all day before it, believing that I am clever enough to get a high score, however, the result was very awful. From then on, I know if you want to succeed, the most important thing is to get ready for it. Therefore, during the last whole year, I devote all my time to reviewing my lessons. The only reason is that I know there isn’t a lucky d og in the world, and on the way to success, hardworking is the key. 精彩亮点分析：亮点一：疑问句开头，引发阅读兴趣亮点二：过去完成进行时的使用使文章意思表达的更清晰亮点三：分词做伴随状语，使文章档次提升亮点四：be +adj.+enough to do sth. 足够…做某事亮点五：条件状语从句的使用亮点六：不定式做表语亮点七：devote one’s time (in)to…把…奉献给…亮点八：表语从句的使用

五、连接词汇总：

1. 表起始:first of all, to begin with, in my opinion, according to, so far, as far as等

2. 表时间: first, at first, then, later, in the end, finally, afterwards, after that, since then, for the first time,

at last, as soon as, the next moment, meanwhile, later on, soon, finally等

3. 表空间: on the right/left, to the right/left of, on one side of… on the other side of…, at the

foot/top/end of, in the middle/centre of, next to, far from, in front of等

4. 表因果:for, because of, one reason is that… another reason is that…,since,as, as a result (of),so，thus，

therefore，as a result 等

5. 表转折:but, yet, however, after all, in fact, while, instead of, unlike, although, after all等

6. 表列举:for example, such as, like, in other words, and so on等

7. 表推进:what’s more, furthermore,on one hand… on the other hand…, in addition to, as well, still,

also, in other words, not only…but also…, besides,moreover…等

8. 表总结:generallly speaking,in short, in a word, in general, in brief, in all等

9. 表示目的：for this purpose，for this reason，so that，in order that，so as to，in order to…

10. 表示让步：although，though，even though/if，no matter wh—

六、从句在写作中的使用：

1. 不用说……It goes without saying that … = （It is） needless to say （that）…

= It is obvious that …

例：不用说早睡早起是值得的。

It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.

2. 在各种……之中，……Among various kinds of …，… /= Of all the …，…

例︰在各种运动中我尤其喜欢慢跑。

Among various kinds of sports, I like jogging in particular.

3. 就我的看法……；我认为……

In my opinion, …

= To my mind, …

= As far as I am concerned, …

= I am of the opinion that …

例：In my opinion, playing video games not only takes much time but is also harmful to health.

就我的看法打电动玩具既花费时间也有害健康。

4. 随着人口的增加……With the increase/growth of the population, …

随着科技的进步…… With the advance of science and technology, …

例：With the rapid development of Taiwan's economy, a lot of social problems have come to pass.

随着台湾经济的快速发展许多社会问题产生了。

5. ……是必要的 It is necessary （for sb.）to do / that …

…… 是重要的 It is important/essential （for sb.）to do / that …

…… 是适当的 It is proper （for sb.）to do / that …

……是紧急的 It is urgent （for sb.）to do / that …

例：It is proper for us to keep the public places clean.

It is proper that we （should） keep the public places clean.

我们应当保持公共场所清洁。

6. 花费spend … on sth. / doing sth. …

例：我们不应该在我们不感兴趣的事情上花太多的时间。

We shouldn't spend too much time on something we aren't interested in.

7. how 引导的感叹句

例：那至少可以证明你很诚实。

At least it will prove how honest you are.

8. 状语从句

A）如果你不……，你就会……If you don't …，you'll …

例︰If you don't keep working hard, you'll lose the chance.

如果你不坚持努力工作，你就会失去这次机会。

B）如此……，以至于……so … that …

例：At that moment, I was so upset that I wanted to give up.

当时，我非常伤心，最后都想放弃了。

C）每当我听到……我就忍不住感到兴奋。Whenever I hear …， I cannot but feel excited.

每当我做……我就忍不住感到悲伤。Whenever I do …， I cannot but feel sad.

每当我想到……我就忍不住感到紧张。Whenever I think of …， I cannot but feel nervous.

每当我遭遇……我就忍不住感到害怕。Whenever I meet with …， I cannot but feel frightened.

每当我看到……我就忍不住感到惊讶。Whenever I see …， I cannot but feel surprised.

例：Whenever I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot but feel sad.

= Every time I think of the clean brook near my home, I cannot help feeling sad.

每当我想到我家附近那一条清澈的小溪我就忍不住感到悲伤。

9. 宾语从句

我认为，…… / 我认为……不I think / I don't think that …

我想知道是否……I wonder whether …

例：He doesn't think I should stop him joining the club.

他认为我不应该阻止他参加这个俱乐部。

10. Since + S + 过去式， S + 现在完成式。

例：Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.

自从他上高中，他就一直很用功。

专项练习（practice）

I．Writing(作文) (共20分)

99．Write at least 60 words about the topic “How to protect myself”．(以“如何保护自己”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

提示：自我保护是青少年需要掌握的重要技能。请谈谈你在生活中怎样进行自我保护(可结合生活中的某一个情景或具体事例，如：面对灾难如何自救，如何预防受骗或侵害，如何避免生活中的意外，等等)。

Phrases for reference(以下短语仅供参考)：

ask…for help calm down in danger prevent．．．from

(注意：文中不得出现具体人名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。)

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II. Writing (作文) (共20分)

94.Write at least 60 words about the topic “ This time next year“ (以“明年此时”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)

你是否想象过，明年此时，你的生活会发生怎样的变化？你对自己或他人有怎样的期待？你能为此做些什么？）

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（注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分

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The following sentence patterns are for reference only. ( 以下句型仅供参考)

?I hope to /I hope that...

?Perhaps I will...

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III.Writing (作文): (共20分)

99.Write a letter in at least 60 words according to the given situation (根据所给情景写一封

不少于60词的信)

Suppose you are Joe. Your friend Betty is upset about a coming exam for she cares too much about the result. What do you think? Try to offer her some advice. (假如你是Joe, 你的好朋友Betty 因为过于在意考试结果而感到焦虑。请给她写一封信，谈谈你的看法，并给她一些建议。) (注意：文中不得出现任何姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。)

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